My second piece first draft (Please do not copy any of this, I will hunt you down).

The Christmas present By Georgina Bengeyfield

One Christmas morning a girl got a toy,
“What’s that?” she said. “Isn’t that for a boy?”.
So, she threw the toy and cried with dismay,
“Mummy, you’ve ruined my Christmas day!”.
The mother worried, grabbed the toy by the top,
“Don’t worry dear, we’ll go back to the shop”.

They zoomed along in a bright red car,
The girl hoped it wasn’t too far.
Looking through the misty window,
they were getting nearer, not long to go.

The snow was glistening, crunched as they tread,
their way to the shop, snowflakes land on her head.
The shop door creaked open, as they walked on through,
a voice echoed “Hello, how may I help you?”

“We would like something girly” The mother replied,
“You’ve come to the right place, over there!” he cried.
The shop was very old, had every type of toy,
something for a girl, or something for a boy. 

There was so much choice, she couldn’t believe her eyes,
toys of every colour, shape and size.

The mother said, “Darling have you found something you like?”,
“How about this flowery, purple and pink bike?”
The girl  tried riding round the store,
but tumbled off the seat and fell onto the floor.
She cried “Oh no! That simply won’t do!
it’s got a broken wheel, silly you!”

The mother helped the girl stand,
they continued looking round the shop, holding each other’s hand.

The girl found a mysterious looking box on the end of the shelf,
Could it be the ideal thing for herself?
She opened the box, and peered inside,
a mixture of many plastic animals she spied.
“Oh no! That simply won’t do!
there are too many, I only wanted a few!”

From the other end of the shop,
the girl heard a huge squelchy pop.
“What’s that?” She did squeal,
her mother said “Why don’t you have a feel?”
Squelch! Squelch! Squelch!
“Oh no! That simply won’t do!
it’s really slimy and gross, ew!”

The mother sighed, grabbed the girls hand,
“Hurry up darling, I’ve got a roast dinner planned”.

 Her mother was panicking about the time,
she was surprised the girl didn’t like the slime.
“Look at this colourful, beautiful dress!
would you like to have this then yes?!”
The girl cried, “Oh no! That simply won’t do!
that wouldn’t fit me if I grew!”

 What is it the girl wants? Do you know?
Is it this shiny trumpet she can blow?

Her mother found a fluffy, white sheep,
she knew it would be something the girl would keep.
Her mother squeezed the toy, “Moo! Moo!” it said,
“This would be nice for you to cuddle in bed”.
But, the girl cried, “Oh no! That simply won’t do!
sheep go ‘Baa’ and cows go ‘Moo’!”

The girl dragged her mother across the shop,
her mother arms began to flop.
“Come on my dear, you’re taking too long”

The girl simply couldn’t choose,
there were so many toys she could use.
She suddenly noticed something hidden,
it was big, blue, and looked like it could be ridden.
It was a sledge. Exactly the same as her mother had bought her,
she took a moment, and pondered “er...”


“Oh... Yes! That will do!
I finally found what I want mummy, woo!”
The mothers face lit up with joy,
“Finally, we found you your perfect toy!”

For the rest of the day, they sledged through the snow,
the girl didn’t complain not at all, not once though.
“Mummy, it’s just like Santa’s sleigh!
I really love this Christmas day”.